We have been trying hard to show, not tell when we’re writing. Showing is much more effective than telling – if we tell, we just say how someone looks or feels. When we show, we describe far more. Here are some examples of writing that shows, not tells:
His eyebrows are scrunched up. His face is burning with fire and he’s going to explode. He’s glaring at me and there’s fire in his eyes. His voice is deep and dark. His body is shaking with anger!
by Chloe W
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Glen was nervous. His head was shaking with fear. He was twisting his fingers and hands. Blood rushed through his ears. He crossed his arms. His face was boiling like fire.
by Jordan
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Jack was shaking his head. His feel was constantly tapping the floor and he was wiggling his hands. He hummed in a low voice.
by Jesse
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